I am afraid that I have to agree with fewmets.
When I said that you tell the story while focusing on your character, I DID state that you must still follow the storyline. Also, do not post anything that was NOT stated in the previous posts.
I have taken you into consideration, being that every time I post I TRY to correct the storyline. You might ask why you can't see that. The answer is simple; I do not include the correction because it will be too auspicious.
I have given fewmets her position not because of any stupid and non-feasible reason. I gave her the position because english is her first language and she has a fluent tongue.
No one has a right to flame/annoy her because of this post, this is because of the rules imposed, and those which you agreed to follow upon registration on this site.
While we're on the topic, I would like to inject a small request.
I would like to request that, if possible, each poster try his/her best to examine his/her grammar before submitting the final post. Sure you can edit it later, but it would not only save you time but offer the satisfaction of a job well done.
AM I UNDERSTOOD?